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I've been waiting to hear from you
Since you left last week.
You didn't say anything about the future
And I'm thinking you don't want one.
You've stated your case,
I've made mine clear as well.
I spend my time thinking about everything else
But you and me and what happens next.

I know you'll read this and feel nothing,
That's something I've come to accept.
You cut me out the second you hung up the phone
But you know I'm still out there, waiting.
I will only wait for a little while,
You are not everything this world has to offer.
I still care for and love you,
But it's getting harder every day.

I want you around,
To talk to and to be with.
But I know that you won't allow it
Because you won't let yourself go there again.
I've been here long enough and seen a lot with you
That it makes it hard to accept that you've chosen this.
All I've got left is this waiting game I'm playing,
Wondering when, and if, you'll ever call again.


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The following comments are for "Limbo"
by bobothewonderchicken

Yes, but is it poetry?
It's poetry. But its also a (very despondant-sounding) love letter. I want to know - did this ever actually get sent? Was it written as a poem then?
For all that, it's not a bad poem. It flows well, and it makes it's point clearly. Nice.

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: August 8, 2002 )

I'm not sure myself
i'm not sure it _is_ poetry. i've been taught all through school that poetry is subjective. it doesn't have to rhyme, have a set pattern, anything like that. i guess this was my brave attempt at free verse. but take it as you will.


as for the love letter idea, yeah, it kind of is. it's basically a collection of thoughts that i've had recently and i had to get them out somehow - this was the end result. and no, it never got sent. i'm not that courageous. perhaps one day, i will.



thanks for the comments.

( Posted by: bobothewonderchicken [Member] On: August 9, 2002 )

OMG
This is exactly the way I felt about someone last year. Those were tough times. This brought back memories. Good job expressing your emotions.

( Posted by: pengster13 [Member] On: August 10, 2002 )

T'was good...
I liked this. I think it's something that most people can relate to in some shape or form, and that is why it is a good poem.
I think It is a poem, but It doesn't need to be, It just is (if you can understand that at all).

Nice one...

--Jasmine

( Posted by: Jasmine [Member] On: August 11, 2002 )





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