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what is me?
a memory, steming from the time
i died and birthed in
hell, heaven, earth

i can taste you
in the back of my mouth
i knew your life in that
moment my eyes met

what is you?
a seperated, still alive
organ, with a pulsing nerve
attached to my thin slice
of existance

what is they?
a grey mattered, grouping
of a single cell
that made love
for a billion years
with itself




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The following comments are for "what is me?"
by IlichVladikov

"Separated", among many other...
...typos & grammatical mistakes. (ie. should it be "Who am I?" and

I'm struggling to grab a meaning or any clarity from this poem. I would primarily attribute this to the fact that this poem is flooded with grammatical mistakes. I would recommend that you type your poems in Word, then review them, then cut and paste the corrected ones here.

( Posted by: poliarch [Member] On: October 4, 2005 )

yes...
well, who am i, and what is me, are two different questions the latter being grammatically incorrect, yes, but also not dealing with my identity or who i think i am, i know who i am, i have a name and family, and other things that link me to my identity, when asking what is me, i am avoiding "i" and "who", it's hard to explain, but i think you'll understand what im trying to accomplish by phrasing it that way

( Posted by: IlichVladikov [Member] On: October 9, 2005 )





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