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Perfect Picture
...Not a soul
can see the cracks
...Cept you and me

Did you think I didnít know?
...You knew...
Those corpses in the closet
..donít conceal themselves.

Day by Day
We take our blades..
Face to Face..
on our mound of corpses
..We dance...

Dance our SilverScarlet dance..
And with your blood on me
and mine on yours.
we smile...

Yes, my love..
We smile
Smile as we fall.

Watch a falling comet,
Jump up and bop it.
Dance with a hobbit,
and leave me a comment.

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