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the boats zooming 1 by 1.the dolphins gliding 2 by 2.the sharks choping 3 by 3.the jellyfish jumping 4 by 4.the stingrays stinging 5 by 5.the starfish sticking 6 by 6.the seaweed swooshing 7 by 7.the krabs pinching 8 by 8.the squids squirting 9 by 9.the snakes slithering 10 by 10.


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by AshyP

great story!
Written by a child, I'm impressed! The words and the concept behind the story are quite impressive. Not sure how old the child is but still a great story! Keep writing young lady! You have a bright future indeed!

( Posted by: jjjschmidt [Member] On: September 27, 2005 )

Ashley P- good job!
Ashley, this was a nice story. My son, Kyle, writes too. You can read his poems here under the name, "theamazingkyle". He is now six years old. How old are you?


( Posted by: FeliciaStone [Member] On: September 27, 2005 )

How interesting
I enjoyed this very much and am awestruck with your style. Great job. Keep up the good work.


( Posted by: Char [Member] On: September 30, 2005 )

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