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Hair dyed too dark for her years,
Wrinkled tights, size too large,
Scholl sandals and worn innersoles,
Patchy bleached denium with grufty cuffs,
Make-up tide marks on wattle chin,
The 'four occasions' black suit,
Courses, interviews, meetings and funerals,
Bling bling, bling bling,
Will anyone answer to those Bellbotton trousers,
More bottom than belle,
Can you see at the back?
Am I blocking your view?
Key phrases to annoy,
Vision, window of opportunity,
Policies, guidelines and procedures,
If you'd all like to complete your evaluation sheets now!

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Damian Hutchinson


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The following comments are for "Horses for Courses"
by Tarquers

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Great. Simply great. I really loved the imagery you presented. I had to read it twice to get where it was going and maybe I still didn't get it, but it has a lovely sound to it.

Well done.
-a

( Posted by: amie [Member] On: September 22, 2005 )

Hmm ...
Okie- I am left with only a vague idea of how the title might inter-relate to the read ... The read itself, I liked. From the early ascriptions to the latter part allusive bits- I am not real sure about the affect (effectiveness) of the closing line however ...

All in all, well done Tarquers.

Peace,
Po

( Posted by: Porphyry [Member] On: September 23, 2005 )





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