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When you were with me,
I listened to music everyday.
There was no silence
Just noise under our noise
Noise behind our noise
Noise in and through and over
All our static noise.

And when I left,
I took my CDs;
I took my radio;
I even took the stereo;
All the music, I took
But I left you.
Now there is silence.

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The following comments are for "The Sound of Us"
by Persephone

Persephone, welcome back
and you are writing such heart-wrenching poetry. I think I will leave Lit. now that I am alive with powerful emotions.
Thanks to you and Viper. Not a bad thing, I think you wrote a wonderful poem here Per. Very well done.

To me, silence can have the loudest message ...

Take very good care,

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: September 17, 2005 )

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