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Not a great number of times
But ever so often
She would ask about the book.

Her friends were force-fed
Its contents
And sometimes threw-up
On the playground.

As she grew older
It was explained
In more detail.

Many think it should be
Rated X, if not illegal,
To expose a child to it.

At the very least think it
Cruel to feed the innocent
Mind the book.

And that it preys upon
Many throughout their
Whole lives.

Much in the same way
Sexual abuse affects
The abused child.

Now that she is grown
She is thankful
But as a child, a part of
Her felt deprived.

Banning the book for
The duration of her
Childhood
Broke the cycle of abuse.

Out of the darkness
A freethinker is born.



------
Charmr


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The following comments are for "The Book"
by Charmr

Thanks, Charmr
You just wrote my story.

Lans

( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: September 15, 2005 )

The Good Book?
Possibly the same thinking that goes into stoping children playing x rated, violent, bloodthirsty, sick computer games goes into stopping children reading the 'revelations' in the book. Though I must admit sometimes the games are less horrific, as they do not usually end up in genocide.(they do have the demons and devils, murder etc. etc. though).

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: September 15, 2005 )

Biblical abuse
Well done. This captures my experience with the Bible so well that I feel as though you know me. As I got older, my growing horror at the Bible's glorification of genocide, deceit, and hatred (despite the lip service given to compassion in the Gospels) delivered me to the point that I swore I would never subject my own children to it.

And I haven't.

Have you read Russell's "Education and the Social Order"? You might like it.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: September 16, 2005 )

Sorry Romay
I'm sorry I didn't start the ball rolling by saying that this was exceptionally well written. You didn't need to 'tell' with all the 'showing' that you did. You were able to create a fresh metaphor that carried itself for a length without losing steam, but building it.

I commend you for it.

It so happens that it mirrors my childhood, and that gave me pause, so I remarked and rated.

I am very sorry that your poem is being used as a sounding board for religious debate. "lord knows" there is plenty of that going on all over this site's front page, adn it's a shame that it has to carry on here.

I wish that other people would follow your lead and use this site to post their creative writing about their beliefs/Belief Systems. You deserve better.

Lans

( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: September 16, 2005 )

Sorry Charmr
I am sorry for taking up space. No Eric, I did not get upset, just to let you know I am not a politician.

But some people need to practice what they preach! Yes., especially when they are commenting on others work and downing their choice of words.


Blessings,
{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: September 16, 2005 )

Romay, this is excellent
I know you'll get a kick of all the comments.

My own, well I suffered the book. Survived it and grew into my own books.

Very well written. I could use more of this quality read. Makes me feel alive. Make sense?

Thanks for writing such a good poem for us to share with you.

Dar

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: September 16, 2005 )

Harrry Potter?
Romay,

I forgot to say how much I liked your poem, I thought this would have been apparent in my response and I enjoy work for the message it conveys anyway!

Jeannie,
'But some people need to practice what they preach! Yes., especially when they are commenting on others work and downing their choice of words.'

I am not sure if this was aimed at me, but I do practise what I preach to the best of my ability. I have never been anything but complimetary to the strength of your beliefs but do feel that where a piece of poetry stimulates my emmotions I have the right to express my opinions.

I do enjoy Hary Potter and feel that this is harmless fiction. I agree with you, and so stated in my reply to Romay, that PC games can be extremely harmful and in fact do lead to some being pushed out of reality into a world of hate.

However, I will comment on the bible as I see it, and make my own decisions on it's validity. I am equally at home quoting chapters that I feel have meaning and beneficial 'messages', as I did recently quoting a full chapter from 'James' as expressing my disgust at some of the 'messages' given in the old testament and 'Revelations' as I have also done in several comments.

Again may I say I admire you for your strength in your faith, but feel that in agreeing with a poets work I should not attract comments myself accusing me of hypocrocy.

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: September 16, 2005 )

Ivor No1
This was not even close to your remarks. why did you think I was directing at you? No, I was talking about someone else, not even Eric.

Blessings,
{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: September 16, 2005 )

Apology-Jeannie
Jeannie,

My apologies, I love debating religion, I hate arguing over it! I have been accused of getting angry lately by another poet when I thought I was purely expressing an opinion and I guess this had led me into believing that your comments on Harry Potter after readings Eric saying I loved the books, were directed at me.

Again, sorry for the misunderstanding,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: September 16, 2005 )

Psychic
Mr.Davies;
You are a psychic, than you should have known I was not talking about you. I told you, I respect you, did you forget that?

I respect you, but you got it all wrong! what I was trying to say above, was that the comments that I made had no effect toward you or your comment at all. I wasn't even talking about Eric. I was talking about someone else who was critizing instead of looking at what they be doing to other poets when they read their work, because I want say critique, more of smart remarks!

Be Blessed Mr. Davies, sorry for the mixed up. sorry charmr. Great poem by the way, I loved it.

Blessings,
{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: September 16, 2005 )

The Book
Might as well add my $1.50 Charmr, although pretty much everything has been said. This is one hell of a read...combined with the comments. I am leaving you with a 10 and a :)

Always,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: September 16, 2005 )

Romay's book
Romay, I must say I have read this several times in the last couple of days. It hits much closer to home than I care to admit. You do such a wonderful job at making us think. Thank you.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: September 17, 2005 )

wow 217 Romay
I just had to come and comment. I knew this would get such a good viewing as well as rating. Well done my sweet friend.

and Nae is right, you always manage to get us 'thinking'.

Darlene ;)

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: September 17, 2005 )

Thanks To All
Lans, for the commendation and for being so open.....Ivor, for the thought, opinion and enjoying the message.....Bob, the comment was a right-on play-by-play and to get a "brilliant" from you means a lot, as you are so talented.....Eric, for the comments both on and off the piece, very interesting.....Viper, for the well done and to hear you also did the same was nice.....Jeanne, for the great poem and loved it.....Charlene, for the buck-fifty and ten.....Dar, for always commenting and sharing your experience with the book.....and last but not anywhere near least Nae, for letting me know that I was able to make you think. To me that is everything.....Romay

( Posted by: Charmr [Member] On: September 21, 2005 )





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