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And I?
I have no voice
no choice
no plan, except
survive, except
one-more-day, except
begging for love
begging for understanding,
like a bell ringer outside Wal-Mart at Christmas;
but I know:
No one pays them any attention.


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The following comments are for "Untitled"
by Persephone

except
I would love to see how this reads with every line ending in except. I think that would kind of bring the meaning home a little better.

( Posted by: bhagwandave [Member] On: September 14, 2005 )





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