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Love isn't all it's cracked up to be
Because sometimes crack is all it is.
So what do we do after the sex and the drugs?

We sit on the porch, side-by-side,
Never speaking for fear of what the words might mean
Until we are both homeless and helpless
And the dog is the only one who speaks.


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The following comments are for "Three-minute poem based on the prompt "Dog""
by Persephone

Great Craic!
If you really put this together in 3 minutes, I salute you! It's near perfection in succinct insight and delicacy. I think my version would go:

Love isn't all it's cracked up to be
Sometimes the craic is all it is
So what do we do after the sex and the drugs?

We sit on the porch, side-by-side,
Never speaking for fear the words might mean
Until we are both homeless and helpless
And only the dog still speaks.

...but only becuse I'm a reductionist, and like ambivalent meanings in my poems. It's lovely as it is.

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: September 15, 2005 )

Hell yes
This poem kicks ass in a way that I thought only a hit of crack could. Those first two lines are pure gold, and the others ain't half-bad either.

More, please.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: September 16, 2005 )

Ambivalent??
Ambiguous. Ambiguous. Sorry! (Must learn to restrict my postings to the daytime: this is hardly the best place to wander around gettin' illiterate in the early hours...)

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: September 16, 2005 )





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