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My American Dream

Life's major desicions
easy.....yet easy seems so far
In the end it isn't how you play this game,
but who and what you are.

Things just didnít go as I planned.
In and/or out of love,
I will never understand.
Falling out of control,
still spiralling
but all the while staying true to my soul.

I am passionate,
but I can rarely handle it.
I am so in touch with my emotion.
but if they understood
the ďjust to say HiĒ card I wrote them
they would have seen my devotion,
and that I am so very sorry,
that I had to be different,
but I had to be me.
And you know me. I wasn't going to listen.
I knew I would miss them,
but it's the way it had to be, for me.
Trying to be something other than
the usual pretend to beís.

I had to experience this first hand
by myself fucking it up,
falling down and toughening up,
and without anyones help.... getting up.
And of course doing it over and over again.
Itís what I think makes the man.

Some will disagree with me and thatís fine,
but mediocrity isnít my sceneÖ.
I wont apologize, not this time.
For I am living My American Dream.


If a poet ruled the world......what a pleasant place it would be!

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The following comments are for "My American Dream"
by LamemansTerms

My American Dream
Insightful, relatable and honest. I liked your flow as well. Thank you for sharing a piece of yourself.

( Posted by: Mokha [Member] On: September 14, 2005 )

hey thanks for taking the time to provide some feedback on my poem, I really do appreciate that, and it is always welcome, thx

( Posted by: LamemansTerms [Member] On: September 14, 2005 )

Your first stanza sounded uncharacteristically preachy, but you pulled through the angst and made this solid. Your last stanza was a perfect closer. Props.


( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: September 15, 2005 )

hey how are ya? THX for the comment I treally do appreeciate the feedback, it is always welcome-thanks again

( Posted by: LamemansTerms [Member] On: October 2, 2005 )

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