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***Be advised: This piece contains polite-society-sensitive slang words and phrases.***


Given pox-laced blankets/Marched a thousand miles
Gave up on hope/Handed crack-filled vials
Survived in dwellings made out of mud
Trumped-loan dealin' with goverment HUD

Alcohol
Heroin
Moonshine
John Blaze
Peyote chants
Cocaine rants

Uprise
Riot
Hatchet
Trigger
Tonto
Sambo
Savage
Nigger

Demised through warfare
Held down in welfare
Sent to reservation humbled
Moved to inner city crumbled
Dream-prize-cash casino rooms
Gangsta-Death-Row record boomz

Big Jim Thorpe
Clay-Ali
Pocahontas
Ashanti
Running Bear
Jordan Air
Tepee tent
Crib for rent
Hand to mouth
Dirty South

Native stand souvenir
Corners held/Lost to fear

Uprise
Riot
Hatchet
Trigger
Tonto
Sambo
Savage
Nigger

Raindance
Breakdance
Warrior
Soldier
Tribal dresses
Rainbow tresses
Signal smokin'
Burner token
Ambush tree
Drive-by spree
Arrowhead
Nine with lead

Uprise
Riot
Hatchet
Trigger
Tonto
Sambo
Savage
Nigger

9/9-10/05
A "Put-On-Paint/Tool-Up Production"

------
below the subliminal
deep within manipulation
that's where tr^th resides

2 Dec 2011






























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The following comments are for "Colorfornicated"
by Bobby7L

Fierce
Bobby,

This one reminds me of the style of "Subterranean Homesick Blues"... Very nicely done with the imagery and emotion.

Lans

( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: September 12, 2005 )

G-Girl /Colorfornicated
Lans- Any reference to Dylan when talking about my lyrics is taken as high compliment.

This one kinda just penned itself. That's been happening frequently, of late...

"Fierce!" Thanks!

B7L.1.P3.CA.---^^H.

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: September 12, 2005 )

bwdave/Jeannie/chapter1
Thanks for reading and letting me know.

B7L

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: September 16, 2005 )

Colorfornicated
Bobby;
You are an excellent poet/writer/lyricist.
But I did not like the "N" word and the way some writers on here use slang words. But that is your gift of writing, and I respect that. But I still read your work all the time, you write beautiful lyrics.

Be Blessed,
{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: September 16, 2005 )

Moving
First of all, thanks to you for writing this and thanks even more to those that responded to these murmurings gone verbal. I have my own feelings but would never want to come off as insensitive to matters of civility, prejudism, etc...

These words move me. They're not polite. They don't carefully dance around sensitive issues, elusively pointing out injustices with winks and nods meant only for those minds insightful enough to have already been concerned. They're brazen and in my face. I was offended by them and made to look in the mirror of my mind.

Having read the work of another such writer a few months ago, I was moved to forward it with the following note. I would like to credit your work with it as well.

Thank you Mr. William

----------------

Every few decades or sometimes every few centuries great minds are given to us. Those minds shed a bright light on the darker things in life and for the first time, the collective human conciousness is graced with the privilege of insight such as it has not known before. It is no crime that so much time passes between these beacons of brilliance. Rather it is a crime that, for lack of inspiration, we look to lesser and dimmer things while they shine their light on us from all directions.

( Posted by: Tamir [Member] On: October 3, 2005 )

Tamir/ On "Colorfornicated"
Thanks for reading and letting me know. Am not up to speed with your posts, but will find.

Big number noted.

Bobby7L

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 3, 2005 )

BOBBY
hEY this was damn good. I really like the way you said so much with very little in certain places (ahem) This is a kind of putting yourself out there and open to some saying you are ...well pushing it too far with some of the things you were refering to, but I say Fuck em--this was really one of the most creative pieces I have read here. I really liked how you showed basically the demise of society over a generation or whatever (time) and it is so true, the words you used almost had to be used to express your view properly......good job
Lamemansterms

( Posted by: LamemansTerms [Member] On: October 9, 2005 )

Pure crap
Let's burn Bobby at the stake. Any takers?

(good work, son)

( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: October 12, 2005 )

Am already alight...
Thanks A.

..New from you?...Cough it up.

RW

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 12, 2005 )

Gimme a beat?
I hear music...

Great piece. I'm bookmarking it. Cuz yeah, I hear music.

( Posted by: yadig [Member] On: October 13, 2005 )

yadig/tinalouise
yadig- Welcome to Lit. Thanks for reading and letting me know.

Tina- Much appreciated. Glad you found this one. Ironically, almost slipped through cracks..


Thanks again,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 13, 2005 )

hey
this works.
cool

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: October 30, 2005 )

soos/ Dog gone at it...
Thank ya kindly.

"Cold holdin' what I got/Hot/Like a shaker-spot..."
-BobbyG

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 30, 2005 )

Laura & Robin*
Thank you both for reading and letting me know.

I stopped rating pieces soon after arriving here. (See: *"Not a poem for a 10") I have no idea how pieces are rated. I've seen many a pedestrian, highly derivative, banal, grammatically challenged, lacking unique perspective/originality, as well as creativity, receive 10's....I'll wear "1" as badge.

Bobby7L

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 8, 2006 )





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