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Time was we had the fireworks
Time was we had the flames
Time was we had the flashing skies
Now all Iíve got is pain

Time was we had forever
Time was we had time to burn
But I guess I wasted time
And I got wasted in return

Oh sure, Iíve got forever now
Itís old and itís alone
Itís reeling in at 2am
And noone being home

Itís the musty smell of a bleak motel
In every town I leave
Itís so long sleeping solo
Iíve forgotten how I breathe

Itís heartache and itís heart disease
(Oh babe, I canít say how
But if longing was cholesterol
I wouldnít be here now)

And most of all itís Time that Was
When time was mine and yours
And itís hanging on to Time Was
When time simply ainít no more

Time was I had forever
Time was I had time to lose
But I guess I lost the lot
Now all I got
Is Time Was blues.

Lost the lot
Now all I got
Is Time Was Blues.



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The following comments are for "Time Was Blues"
by MobiusSoul

good song!
Wow this is a sad song.I would love to hear it! Time changes everything doesn't it? Great job.

( Posted by: mmiss [Member] On: September 9, 2005 )

Oh dear...
...I think I was going for smiles, not sadness, with this one! But I guess there's no reason a parody can't be sad in its own right. (I too would love to hear it sung, but since I have all the musical talent of a damp donut - now THAT really is sad - the words must stand alone :( )

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: September 9, 2005 )

Caitlin - Time Was Blues
Caitlin, you should write more stuff with this kind of tone. This one's very very very good! There are parts I liked best, and thought would be very good to listen to when already sung (I suppose you have a melody for this?): musty smell of a bleak motel/ *and* so long sleeping solo/ I don't know how it's really called in poetry when the rhymes are in one line, aside from the ones that are at the end of each. It works very well here especially that this is a lyrics of a song! This would be a reverse of the one I wrote The Things We Never Did, now just don't go look at that one, it's not any good like this.

Now, when I review lyrics here at lit.org I also suggest artists who could sing the song. For this one I'd like uhmm... Harry Connick? Feinstein? Just not sure if these artists stick to one particular accent.

I love this very much. :)

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: September 11, 2005 )

Kind of Blue...
Thank you Peter, for the kind words - naturally, you're insightful enough to pick up on my favourite verse, the very one which persuaded me to post this piece in the first place!
For me, phases of lyric-writing usually occur when the poetry isn't, so I've come to regard lyrics rather as 'cheat's poetry'. Lately, though, I'm seeing them more as an art in their own right. Perhaps, after all, I will post more sometime...

(Oh, and I sure would be honoured to hear this from one of your artists! I suppose I had in mind one of those folksy musical poets of the 70s - Cohen or Al Stewart, perhaps, someone who could sing with tongue just-a-little-in-cheek and still sound suitably mournful...)

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: September 11, 2005 )

"Cheat's Poetry" & Oh! Morrissey!!!
I really, really like this song. I think you're right, Caitlin -- it's ironic and mournful simultaneously. So, Morrissey would *have* to sing it, right? There's no one else in music who can affect a blithe and suicidal tone in tandem. My favorite line of his, and a great example of this: "She says 'I know you and you cannot sing' I say 'That's nothing, you should hear me play piano'" Er, on second thought, you'd have to hear it. That quote just looks random in print.

"Cheat's poetry" made me giggle. Damn, that's apt.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: December 8, 2005 )

Haze - Hell, yeah!
Now why didn't I think of that? Not so much Morrissey 15yrs ago, all clever-clever angst and sensual spiky ego, but now? Slightly jowly, the still-sharp cleverness growing tired at the edges and the ego nicely tarnished with irony... perfect!

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: December 8, 2005 )

Like it, except for one word
Cholesterol.

( Posted by: andyhavens [Member] On: December 8, 2005 )

Tom Waits/ J.J. Cale
Caitlin- So glad to be deflected here. Lyrics are a passion. Been penning for few decades. One day, may get hang of it...

Really found this entertaining and song-worthy material. Can hear Tom Waits or J.J.Cale..That's good!

I don't care for: "ain't"..Prefer "is"...Just me..You know me and :"the"..(first verse)..If you feel syllable is needed.."our fireworks".."bright" or "hot"'flames'..or nothing in place...Or keep them all!

Enjoyed!...
B7L

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: December 8, 2005 )





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