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Pristine prettiness/Blighted ugliness
Party all day/Urban decay
Fat cuisine/Lean past mean
Sultry house beats/Garbage in streets
So syncopated/Dilapidated
Superdomed magic/Ghetto-homed tragic
Mansions with locks/Unsecured blocks
Top of hill/Iberville
Showy projected/Lowly neglected
Seductive/Corruptive
Cash sow/Real now


09/06-07/05


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below the subliminal
deep within manipulation
that's where tr^th resides

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The following comments are for "One City/Two Tales"
by Bobby7L

As Expected
poignant and deep. You paint a great picture. And this is another cool poem in that dichotomy style you've posted lately.

"fat cuisine / lean past mean" is a killer line.

LkN.o1oC

( Posted by: gibsongirl [Member] On: September 8, 2005 )

Lans
Thank ya kindly...Wrote itself. Just used me as vehicle.

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: September 8, 2005 )

very nice
this whole affair is a sad subject to me, but your comparisons were tastefully done, sadly that contrast exists in every major city, and then some, sadder still is that it took a wave of destruction for people to actually understand the reality of it, and yet they still can't see past their comfortable surroundings.....nicely done....peace

( Posted by: poetryman [Member] On: September 8, 2005 )

Two Tales of One City
poetryman- Thank you for reading and letting me know. Am not up to speed with your work. Will look for it.

Tina Louise- Thanks for kind words. Much appreciated.

chapter1- Big number noted.

B7L

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: September 11, 2005 )

B7L....&BI
Bobby of course, ego me ego you...No dear this is for me sooo home felt...this for me is true to life writing of the incident, biblical or biographical or heartbeats...Bobby, fan I am of yours, Dearheart, I read your picture...it bleeds tears of hope and destruction, yet, I FEEL
a beginning of a new day...

Peace my ...and very well said, Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: September 12, 2005 )

Robinbird
Much thanks for your reading and kind words. Just submitted an opinion piece penned last week: "Citizen Vs. 39 Tons Of Dynamite." You may find it of interest.

Thanks again,
Robert William...B7L

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: September 12, 2005 )

City Tales
I was intrigued by the title here, while i was at your 'Miss Patagia' page.
The timeliness of this spoken in comments above-
seems all the more poignant with now unfolded events- sharp contrasts we have, huh?
thoughtful, and eloquent in a tough way.
thanks-
Elizabeth

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: October 15, 2005 )

When is it sexy story?
Elizabeth- Your reading and letting me know is much appreciated. Nearly every city in our country has its "Iberville." We don't hear much about these blighted, poverty-infected places, day to day. Not sexy. Of course, "perfect storm" stories are. Then we are forced to see/recognize these American realities. 27% unemployment in N. O.'s 9th ward. Not sexy story. Not acceptable either.

Updated classic title. Glad you caught it.

Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 15, 2005 )





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