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Morning


Morning is here
looking at me
like a researcher
clipboard in hand
Morning has theories
it would like to prove
and thinks I am
just the man

Morning is up
running 'round my feet
like a dog that
wants to go out
Morning shoots a glare
like an angry wife
wanting me to be
what I'm not

I don't tell morning
of my plans for it
as I drink my coffee
and wait
I'll shower and shave
and in fresh clothes
leave for work in time
to be late






------
johnlovejr at hotmail dot com


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The following comments are for "Morning"
by Flonigus

John's "Morning"
Really liked: "Morning is up/ running 'round my feet/ like a dog that/ wants to go out."

Entertaining read...

Bobby7L

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: September 7, 2005 )

So few and such morning songs...
You really do have a beautifully light touch with some of your poems. I couldn't have put it better: barely-awake, catching the beady, acquisitive eye of the morning and knowing it will have the last word... wanting just this once to rebel...

(Could the second verse be forced to rhyme, btw? I know it shouldn't matter, but it does seem to want to...)

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: September 7, 2005 )

John - Morning
It would be a sin not to comment on this poem! How very well you could present morning's badgering loom in the, well... morning! I could also hate him - morning, and in the next days might ignore his existence too, the way you did here in your poem; and I be free to do what I want to do or become what I want to become. Yes, one of these days I will! I might or might not go to the office on time. Moreover set my alarm to 11:59am so as to despise him! Bah! ;-)

I smile at this, John. Always, always great, it always feels great to read your stuff!

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: September 9, 2005 )

7L, Mobius, Peter, Tina, Charmr,

Nice comments, all. Thank you so much. Glad it clicked with some others.

Bobby, my girlfriend thinks that your "7L" must mean "not square". She brought to my attention that "L7" was a colloquialism for "square", because of the shape created, either written or when formed by the hands.

In case you were wondering, I don't have a dog.

MobiusSoul, you are right, I could make S2 rhyme. I have thought of a couple of ways to do it. I'll allow it to suggest what's best, as it may.

Peter, the sad part is almost always giving-in to the mundane demands of the secular world, even if a few minutes late. It pays the bills, but not the heart.

Thanks, Tina, and Charmr, too.

( Posted by: Flonigus [Member] On: September 10, 2005 )

Flonigus
I really love your style! I don't believe you were here when I was posting. I'm glad you're here now; I'm really enjoying your work!

Felicia

( Posted by: FeliciaStone [Member] On: September 22, 2005 )

Morning. Cowgirl Squirmed.
I do love my mornings. I am the only gal in the world who is early to rise, to cook, to pick up the house, and to make sure YOU have the most wonderful morning - to mention the pitcher of water, the basin, the breakfast in bed and again -?
Take your time, get your things in order, so you can come back, to write rhymes like these. Meanwhile, the Cowgirl squirmed. I can't believe it, and have no regrets.

your coffee.

( Posted by: VickieSALT [Member] On: May 17, 2011 )

Thank you, Tori.
Thank you, Tori, for your response to this piece.

Since the time when I wrote this, I have changed my ways and always arrive quite early for meetings, work, appointments, etc.

( Posted by: Flonigus [Member] On: May 17, 2011 )





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