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Saying Goodbye

you're gone
emptiness
loneliness
distress

why did you leave
death
last breath
said "I Love you"
I'm crying
you're lying
still
peacefully
painlessly
can't hurt thee

I should be happy
sad
mad
selfish
I wish
you were here

miss you
want you
need you
see you
in my dreams
floating
gloating
you're free
eternity
without me
Rest In Tranquility.....

Copyright Bob C Shank

------
"If I told you my reality, you'd
say I have a great imagination,
If I told you my imagination, you'd
say I've lost touch with reality"-Bob Shank, 2004



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The following comments are for "Saying Goodbye"
by poetryman

Saying Goodbye
I once wrote a piece entitled "An Eternity Without Me" as it happens. Not that I'm accusing it of being a cliched line.

This poem was really enjoyable to read aloud and I'm sure it was an enjoyable write.

I felt this piece's strongest point was at the beginning, with the soft wave of rhythm in:

"you're gone
emptiness
loneliness
distress

why did you leave
death
last breath
said "I love you"..."

Had the sensation of a dipping aeroplane, quite relevant in a piece concerned with the emotions surrounding loss.

A. Cain

( Posted by: A. Cain [Member] On: September 6, 2005 )





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