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The constant wars that the Bush administration waged against so-called terrorists throughout George W.'s presidency angered and confused me in ways I cannot even fathom. Feeling both helpless (able to do nothing about foreign policy, able to do nothing to help the innocent Middle Easterners that WE terrorize constantly) and sympathetic (to all those who suffer needlessly so we can remain the world's only superpower), I have decided to express myself through my poetry and lyrics.

The following "song", if you would like to envision it as one, was originally written to reflect the war in Afghanistan, but as the war with Iraq emerged and continues, it has taken on a whole new life. Our soldiers are not the only people dying in this conflict. Remember that...

Enjoy the poetry: Jayson M. Carter


She stood there crying holding the remains
Of what used to be a family
Tears stream down - smiles drained away
What will it take to make you see

Itís all for nothing Ė itís all useless
All this fighting over illusions
Settle down and think things over
Before thereís nothing left
Itís all pointless and senseless
Killing over imagination
Stop the cycle 'cause there's nothing to gain
Exchanging life for a prize you canít earn without pain


She stood there crying holding whatís left
The remains of her hopes and dreams
Bloodstained ground Ė blues skies drained gray
What will it take to make you see

Itís all for nothing Ė itís all useless
All this fighting over illusions
Settle down and think things over
Before thereís nothing left
Itís all pointless and senseless
Killing over imagination
Stop the cycle 'cause there's nothing to gain
Exchanging life for a prize you canít earn without pain


And we sit back relaxed blind to the lies
That we accept with no regrets we let the blind lead the blind
Continue on and before long we'll lose and find ourselves
Coerced, two steps back with blame stacked, assuming the slack

Pick your poison 'cause theyíre all the same
In too deep with the hate it's too little too late
Taken life can't be replaced - what a waste
This mistake will unmistakably reverberate

Itís all for nothing Ė itís all useless
All this fighting over illusions
Settle down and think things over
Before thereís nothing left
Itís all pointless and senseless
Killing over imagination
Stop the cycle 'cause there's nothing to gain
Exchanging life for a prize you canít earn without pain


She stood there crying as the world passed her by
Weeping softly as it left her behind
Killed for a profit - victims of greed
Just more names on a list we'll never see


------
"If the only tool you own is a hammer, every problem will eventually begin to resemble a nail."


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The following comments are for "She Stood There Crying"
by Jayson Carter

She Stood
Fine work. I especially liked the way you used internal rhymes - not an easy thing to do.

You play with words well and that is as rare as it is wonderful.

( Posted by: Enforced Bliss [Member] On: July 31, 2002 )

Thanks
Thank you for your comments. I appreciate your feedback a great deal.

I noticed your comment regarding my internal rhyme schemes, and I will have you know that my first venture into music was with the rap genre, so I have had quite a bit of experience writing rhyming couplets. The form used in the bridge of "She Stood There Crying", which is the part you commented on, is meant to be performed as a rap section in the song, which explains the rhyming pattern.

Thank you for your positivity. It really gives me the boost I need to keep expressing myself...look for more work from me soon.

( Posted by: Jayson Carter [Member] On: August 1, 2002 )

Powerful
Well said...and now that I have read your comment, yes, I can envision this as rap...and what do you know...lyrics a middle aged woman like me can not only understand, but can say, yeah, i agree with that!

( Posted by: Feistyfemale [Member] On: December 28, 2002 )





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