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“Hey baby gimme some sugar,” he hollered from across the street.

I pause, finger twirling a curl and watch him as he looks at another girl.

“come on baby, lets have some fun,” he winks and beckons with a little grin.

I run towards him then stop and blink.

“I’m not at the top of the list,” I think.

My hands clench on a pretend wrench.

“I ain’t no sugar substitute waiting on no bench!”

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by greatsmile


Fairly well written, though some of your non-caps threw me off. A bit too moralistic for my tastes. I still enjoy your work immensely, especially your flash.

( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: August 26, 2005 )

yes well...
I was just playing with the sugar /sugar substitute thing.

( Posted by: greatsmile [Member] On: August 29, 2005 )

dear greatsmile
darned if this isn't some of the flashest fiction i've read for a long time.

you always seem to come up with some pretty clever stuff, greatsmile.



( Posted by: johnjohndoe [Member] On: August 29, 2005 )

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