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The mind is not vacant
and the pen not without ink,

but the notebook is!


The eyes
have their brown

but still blank with their stare.


Even though
August has plenty of beautiful words to say,
it cannot inscribe by itself.
The notebook then will remain unfilled
and the eyes will go on

with

their

emp-ty

gaze.


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*************************************
crystal face I kiss
tongue tastes like sweet cold rain
I fall into pond




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The following comments are for "August"
by peterpaulino

This poem...
is richly abstract. To be so elusive and yet it says exactly what it means. The punctutation and sapcing of the poem is very well done and adds to its richenss.

( Posted by: tarwennevle [Member] On: August 25, 2005 )

Tarwennevle - August
Thank you for reading and appreciating the abstractness of this. This was written quite a long time ago. I just changed its title and posted it here. I will look forward to your posting here. Welcome to lit.org! :)

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: August 26, 2005 )





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