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I'd like you to meet my vacant side.
Frivolous and cold like a caffeine junkie heroine.
You WILL indulge my iniquity if you know what's good for you.
I'll never be lonely again.

..I wish my hypocrisy had lips to kiss...

I'm the most sincere hypocrite you'll ever know.
Trust me, because I'm a fucking liar.
And it's not funny, so stop laughing.

*SIGH!!!* You used to be fascinating.
It must be hard to say "I love you" with a mouthful of poisen.
Come closer so I can spit in both your fucking faces.

Aww, poor baby.
Did you try to do something worthwhile?
I have news for you.
Big news.
Devestating news.

You're a tremendous failure.

Your use of words are cheap

and sadly unoriginal......

your a stupendous liar

but who am I to talk eh?

This is not what you see, this'll never be.
Beware(where?) of facetious speciosity, sweet na´vetÚ.
I'd definitely apologize before the bullet bit you.

Dear love, I live so many lives... you can't even count that high.
Dear mister, dull nevertheless.
What's a euphemism for serial killer?
I'd speak in the present, but it doesn't exist.

Maybe I'll late you perish pretty
if it's not too late to get on my good side.

Pretty becomes rags; oblivious and dispensable.
Brilliant sluts; all soaked up in delerious codependency
Did I tell you you disgust me
does my honesty give you acne?

Venous bitch, bleeding such BIG words you don't (can't) [won't] understand.

Don't fool yourself
my intellect is far superior than yours
and your imagination is far inferior.

I'm the bittersweet queen, impaled on a throne of empathy
and pity
that I throw at my fans sparingly

But I'll permit you a taste, if you permit me your soul.

This is the truth about the insignificant alternates: ...

There aren't enough words to be wasted on your creative mediocrity.

There isn't enough breath to be wasted on your curiosity deficiency.

You're a no body

and you'd never see me

the cruelty I could entice

on your lacey crown of ice

don't be silly doll, I'm not insignificant, my words are efficient.

I'll make an effort to make your grave
a more comfortable place.

So I suppose I should strut.
Somehow, I sow, but I don't reap.
-rrrrrrrip-.. -pluck- -snip snip- deleteteledeleteteled
Let me (for)get that for you.
It's so simple! Clap on, clap off.
Maybe it's just me. Maybe. it's. just. me.
Isn't it pathetic? Isn't a pity?
Isn't it fucking redundant?

I'm so cold your so cold....we all live in glass

and we're all sold for cookies

YOU sympathetically discarded my dead and gave me new,
so now I can play another dead day with you.

Indifference is amusing in small doses,
but it's quite apparent to me now that I've fucking OD'd.
You should've seen the smiles on their faces.
You should've seen the smirk on mine.
But I refuse to float into insipidity with you.

Trouble comes and goes and comes and goes and comes again.
And I flinch only once out of disgust.

and I wish you darling the best of luck

you were the best mind fuck I did ever have.

Briggita M.

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The following comments are for "In the end we all die like cartoons"
by Glass hair of a virgin bride

Can you tell me any reason anyone would want to read this?

( Posted by: xitwound117 [Member] On: August 15, 2005 )

re useless
Can you give me a reason why anyone would not want to read this?

( Posted by: Glass hair of a virgin bride [Member] On: August 15, 2005 )

your monologue

Good anger-fueled monologue, would you like to share to whom you are speaking to, or are you speaking to yourself? They say writers write their best under turmoil.

Keep writing,


( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: August 16, 2005 )

It was written for an old best friend. People fall apart. They write each other shitty poetry. Useless but eh? I made an attempt.

( Posted by: Glass Hair Of A Virgin Bride [Member] On: August 16, 2005 )

better than guns

I never said it was useless, as of matter of fact I don't believe any writing is ever useless. There are times it can definitely need improvement, but in this case, anger is better written down than pulling guns at each other.

Never give up writing no matter what anyone says,


( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: August 16, 2005 )

In case that was a crack at me, I never said give up writing.

Anyway, you pretty much answered this for me. As you said, this was "written for an old best friend", and things of that nature are usually only good for you and that other person to read. The context is simply lost on the reader, and the reader will never fully understand it.

Simply put, in my opinion this piece is too obscure for a reader to care about.

( Posted by: xitwound117 [Member] On: August 16, 2005 )

no crack

intended to anyone.


( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: August 16, 2005 )

We all die
Reads like rap lyrics to me. Can even hear the voice behind it. Interesting rap/rant/poem.

Nae ;0)

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: August 16, 2005 )

Good to see you back again. Nasty little rant, I enjoyed every twist of knife in somebody's ego. Only one thing made me stumble slightly. I thought maybe the last line, although it was still a smack in the face, could've had even more impact.
'You're the best mind fuck I ever had.' might be more of a kick ass phrase. As always, accept or reject, it's your baby.
Take care
Paul the Ogg

( Posted by: Ogg [Member] On: August 25, 2005 )

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