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at each nadir
of autumn despair
you, with eyes afire
are the thunder bird
that migrates
to a land unknown to me

whence I say
I should have loved you instead


there’s something wrong about you
as much as this world
both she and you
are beautiful
once painfully smitten
with sunshine and rain
that one can only do
is run after you

till the last leaf


I wish I could have
an ounce of that gypsy in your soul
so I could embrace again
the thunder bird you’ll once more be

next spring


a/n: though very much different, I'd like to mention that both Sylvia Plath's and (Shefallssoftly)Casey Howard's 'Mad Girl's Love Song' were the ones that inspired me to write this poem.


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crystal face I kiss
tongue tastes like sweet cold rain
I fall into pond




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The following comments are for "a mad boy's song"
by PETERPAULINO

Dream on Peter.
This is so lovely Peter...so gentle and insightful.

You done good son.

Ma

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: August 9, 2005 )

Ma Bea - boy's song
Ma, thank you very much and I am glad you were the first one to find this. Still I am awestruck by Plath's Mad Girl's Love Song, which I realized was a villanelle. I think you should check that out Ma, or you might already have known the poem all the time. Thank you for liking this one, for saying the words that only give me confidence and pride. Love, Pete :)

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: August 9, 2005 )





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