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*Inspired by Londengrey's "red, marble, bloom" thread-*



Just Making Pie


I was rolling the dough for pie,
push-pulling the cold marble.
It was particularly heavy;
I had filled it with water and frozen it.
It helps keep it from sticking.
He came, shouting, threatening.
I had not hung his shirt properly.
He slapped me.
My cheek stung with heat and humiliation.
His hands went to my neck
and my eyes ached from his choke.
I grabbed the counter behind me, desperately searching,
when my fingers fell upon the pin.
I just wanted his hands to go away.

It came down harder than I imagined,
aided so by gravity.

It sounded like the crash of a bowling ball.

Red, red -running and pooling beneath him.

In this garden of blood,
now I can begin to bloom.






------
Elizabeth Maksymiuk


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The following comments are for "Just Making Pie"
by emaks

Pie
He got what was coming to him.......Nice write.........Romay

( Posted by: Charmr [Member] On: August 16, 2005 )

Lifeforce (chi) Blooming (cha-cha boom!)
You must forgive my dear friend Klaire, but she has been ill and could not make it here to bring you the requested feedback.

Yes, yes...this is very good. I see strong images with great clarity. Your words have transported me into that realm and time. I feel your fear and power and then the emergence of a stronger being. Your lifeforce is very strong. I see the birthing of a stronger woman emerging from the blooming redness.

I not only say that "the truth will set you free but first it will piss you off"...I also say "don't take any shit!"

Namaste
Guru Mohammad Jesus Bernstein

( Posted by: MohammadJesusBernstein [Member] On: November 16, 2005 )





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