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This is something I wrote the other day not sure what it means or what I mean by it you can draw your conclusions its a week old so i dont remember why i wrote it anyways here it is



KICK THE DEAD


kick the dead cuz they dont fell nothin

dead as doorbells

dead as doorbells

they dont breathe no more

the dead are your best friends

they dont take no air from u

so kickin the dead cuz they dont feel nothin

dead as doorbells dead as dooorbells

their blood is all cold and they dont need no haircut

u could be with them if u are not careful

kickin the dead cuz they dont feel nothin

dead as doorbells dead as doorbells

U are not stupid u are just alive

u aint not right cuz u dont die

i want to say kickin the dead cuz they dont feel nothin

dead as doorbells dead as dooorbells

God is a lamer

cuz he is to blame

kickin the dead kickin the dead



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The following comments are for "Kick the dead"
by RightingIt

whoa
yeah ok some angst- ya good -got it all out? --glad ya got it out now try some poetry...
I think the term is dead as a doornail

( Posted by: LamemansTerms [Member] On: August 2, 2005 )

Not angsty, but still not great
I don't know what lameman was talking about, there's no angst in here, but the pointlessness and the 'U's ruin the piece.

( Posted by: xitwound117 [Member] On: August 2, 2005 )

Why Dont you Die
Its only when you D I E yo will know what I mean Its only when you feel you are not able to breathe not able to move your hands move your legs no one knows you and you are submerged under the sands of time n people are walkin over your grave.
YOU dont know you have not been dead yet both of you Lamesman and xitwound , you dont know
cuz u are not dead,
THEREFORE WHY DONT YOU DIE!

( Posted by: RightingIt [Member] On: August 4, 2005 )

Righting It...
Dead as doorbells I think is what you meant, I feel dead as doorbells was the invite the dead could not write, nor were your suppose to get...

I liked this in a strange way and write on...
so it's not perfect, it feels, i like it...

Robin

( Posted by: robinbird [Member] On: August 4, 2005 )

Kick the Dead means
I remember now what i meant by this
1) there are folks out there who are poor
2) they are repeatedly stuck by some tragedy or the other
3) they dont have a great life
4) yet their luck doesnt change
5) bad things keep happening to them
6) While they are just living dead
7) and god keeps kicking them with misery
8) thats the reason i wrote this..

Hope it makes sense
neways
Thanks robin n all those who commented like lamesman n xitwound ;o)

Hehehehehehe GOD IS A LAMER GOD IS A LAMER GOD IS A LAMER.

( Posted by: RightingIt [Member] On: August 5, 2005 )

Right on!& DEAD
screwed up last comment, but, with this explaination you made things work for these words even better.
don't know if you are male or female, hey i don't give a sh*t, this is quite ok! and makes
perfect sense...I have walked in those wretched
shoes, until you do, and pray you never, how could you understand!

good write....Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: August 7, 2005 )

Righting It....
I'll have to say, got a laugh out of your last comment,
no disrepect intended....keep on righting it!
Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: August 7, 2005 )

Go to hell , God
Well you created hell so do you ever visit it?
I bet you do dontcha? you gotta rethink about
this world too cuz its gone crazy too n sometimes
its hell on earth so my request to you is
please do go to hell , god

thank ya , have a good day ;o)

( Posted by: RightingIt [Member] On: November 27, 2005 )

Kissmy Pimply Ss
Hehehehe Just being mean n remembering kick the dead was so passionate lol i am so mellow now lol

GOD GOD GOD you rulez dont ya

( Posted by: RightingIt [Member] On: December 22, 2007 )





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