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She was in the choir
An angels face she had.
My seventh grade girlfriend
(The first one that I had.)

So, I joined the choir
Even though I couldn’t sing
And got myself a part-time job
To buy a “friendship ring”

I saw myself beside her
With my hand tucked into hers
I even imagined
Buying jewelry and furs.

She had a smile that warmed a room
Just by being there
And when she walked the sunlight
Seemed to dance upon her hair.

When I think about her
My mind is in a cloud
“I love the ground you walk upon.”
I want to scream out loud.

I finally found the courage
To ask her to the dance.
But when she only giggled
I saw that I’d forgot my pants.

My head popped up in panic
And I began to scream
I was so relieved to find
That it was just a dream.


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All that is necessary for the forces of evil to win the world is for enough good men to do nothing...Edmund Burke


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The following comments are for "Young Love"
by Psycho6058

"Young Love"
This is one of the nicest poems I've read...short, sweet and with a nice story to boot! Best of all, it rhymes... :)
Keep up the good work!!

( Posted by: rafalina [Member] On: August 1, 2005 )

Really, nice dream!
It is really a nice dream as well as a nice poem. So lucky for me to get the courage to get closer to the wonderful poem. Hope to read more! Thanks for your writing!
Clark

( Posted by: Clark [Member] On: August 1, 2005 )

like this
I like above all, the resolution of this poem...."it was a dream"

( Posted by: seyekuyinu [Member] On: August 2, 2005 )

Young Love
Thank you Rafalina,Clark and seyekuyinu for your comments, I'm glad you enjoyed my poem.

( Posted by: Psycho6058 [Member] On: August 2, 2005 )





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