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Baby
I was approaching towards you carefully
Being afraid of waking you up with a startle
I just wanted to give you a soft kiss
Knowing to be with you is not easy
We are of different nationalities
And you are always feeling boundless cold terribly
While together with me
I really love you so much
that I would rather change myself
for you to wander at gobi
As long as you do not refuse me
Or leave me, or drive me out to the windy rain
I really love you so much
that I would rather change myself
As long as you allow me closer
To love you with hugs
I assure you are my goal, my baby
I am wandering lonely
Just do not want others to share you with me
I am dreaming I will be by your side all this way
Willing to be everywhere around you
It is you that made me crazy
You can hear my love echoed by the valley
I believe you are my angel, you are my sweetie
I am feeling my arms around you,
melting in love, melting in bloods
Make certain to see
For you, that is the true feeling more than I can say
With much tenderness


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by Clark

Baby...
Gentle, sweet, soothing, and touching. Wonderful work.

Thanks,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: July 31, 2005 )

Thanks Char...
Thanks so much, Char, for your compliments, I will go on trying, I want to go read your works, they seem wonderful, there is so much I want to learn... good luck!
Clark

( Posted by: Clark [Member] On: August 1, 2005 )

Clark - baby
Now, this one's saying something more and I liked its sweetness. It started with the soft-sweetness of watching someone who is asleep. I can be as selfish at times, NO, MANY TIMES! Not wanting to share my love with others... OF COURSE! That's the way things must be. :) Don't you think so?

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: August 1, 2005 )

Thanks Peter!
Thanks for your nice comments, yeah, I agree love is selfish to some extent, esp. in my poem, hehe...I wrote it for my special friend. Good luck around you!
Clark

( Posted by: Clark [Member] On: August 1, 2005 )





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