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Fault me not for loving you
there’s no pleasure without progression.
Relish in what will be
for passion lives not in mere suggestion.

Relinquish predictable behavior,
deviate through manifestation.
All claims to love will die out
if no moment of physical realization.

Let be, let go, be more
Give in to my advances.
Seek, find and explore
few choices have second chances.


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I am on a journey. Looking for Me. Everyday I get a little closer. The more time goes by the more I realize I'm always changing. This journey could take forever... Renae L. Soler


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The following comments are for "Make It Real"
by nae411

impulse
A calculated impulse you have preserved her. I love it. "...Passion lives not in mere suggestion." Man, what a strong line. What a strong poem! Action overrides suggestion here. You are truly a doer....of poetry, of love, of everything in between and outside. I look forward to seeing more.

( Posted by: loonie [Member] On: July 23, 2005 )

Consequences/Loonie
Loonie thank you so much for reading. This is a note to myself, one that is killing me. I wrote this because I feel this in my heart, live it on paper, but in life I have such a hard time with it. Lately I feel I am living in fear of consequences.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: July 24, 2005 )

Nae - Make it Real
Vhat? A good advice? Definitely one that's not for me, I always do the first move, LOL as I am always like that being an Arian; and often being the first who's heart is broken. But it's okay, really it's okay! Whadya think gurl?

I love this piece very much as you do not speak only for yourself. We are very much alike, this one too is what I'm gonna tell every lover I'd have. :)

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: July 26, 2005 )

2nd Chance missed
Nae,

In every poem I seem to find a gem, a piece of life, a warning, a treasure to accept and remember, in this one it is:

'Seek, find and explore
few choices have second chances.'

The poetry is good, these two lines are exceptional,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: July 27, 2005 )

Peter and Ivor
Peter, be careful you don't want all your lovers comparing notes, lol. I am confident in making the first move (because I have been married so long, lol). Thanks sweetie.

Ivor, I was surprised that people liked the last verse. Thank you so much it means alot to me that you enjoyed.

Nae ;0)

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: July 28, 2005 )

good
You speak with authority because you know what you're talking about, a good way to write a meaningful poem.

Good work.


john

( Posted by: johnlibertus [Member] On: August 5, 2005 )

John Libertus!
Hey you! Talk about missing in action, so good to have you back! Thank you for stopping by and I wasn't even scary, huh???

Nae ;0)

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: August 5, 2005 )

Hello
It seems to me that you just love to explain everything about yourself, no secrets, no shame, ego.
Would you like to do an interview with me? I think I could really pull the good stuff out of you.
If you'd like to check out my interview, it's posted on lit.org.
get back to me.

( Posted by: jesuschriss [Member] On: October 26, 2005 )





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