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You knew I would
just as easily fall for
charming ponkan and apple
inside the fridge joke
as I would
for some beautiful stranger
that you were
boarded in an elevator
four years ago.

You knew Id smile
just as blushingly
as how I did way back then
when you looked my way
but then turned away too soon.

You knew I wouldnt hang up the phone
and dare to miss the punch line
as you knew Id stay that long
waiting for your regard.
You knew,
you knew
Id fall in love with you
and with your charming
ponkan and apple
inside the fridge joke.


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crystal face I kiss
tongue tastes like sweet cold rain
I fall into pond




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The following comments are for "Ponkan and Apple"
by PETERPAULINO

Sweet and romantic
We've all heard that when the 'new-ness' of love fades, the fire is gone. But its only after we grow together, and know each other, that surprises like these can happen.

I love how you tied that 'knowing each other' from the present to a very different kind of knowing in the very beginning of your relationship. -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: July 21, 2005 )

Phil - Apple and Ponkan
That's definitely what I wanted to get as a review for this one, Phil: Sweet and romantic! Why are there some loves that are always new like those ponkan and apple inside the fridge...? and why are there some loves being thrown away like the bitten apple left to rot beside the sink?

Thank you for reading.

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: July 24, 2005 )





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