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Transfer tickets,
Loose change,
And determination
I carry in my pocket.

A stale indifference
Utters no sound
As humans fail to see
Humanity in one another

Thin Air
Thick Thoughts
No conversation

A familiar face
Unknown; once known
Once engaged in interest-
Never paid

A daily dealing
With the living dead.




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The following comments are for "Public Transportation"
by loonie

buses and backpacks

I am fearful to get on a bus now (I gave up driving and owning a car to become a minimalist) and, I live in one of the big target cities. I always carry a backpack and a journal to write about all those "living dead" I call them zombies.
Anyway, sometimes I have a box cutter with me (lol, I bet the FBI is on lit.org), just kidding.
I liked your poem because it is a big reality for many people.

macbeth

( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: July 20, 2005 )

public transportation
Fun read, and sooooooooo true

( Posted by: Psycho6058 [Member] On: July 22, 2005 )

Mass Transit





"Thin Air
Thick Thoughts
No conversation"


That was my favourite bit up there.

Even the thick/thin could be reversed... It's the closet claustrophobe in me. ('closet claustrophobe'... hmm)

This is just very well written. Good work, Loonie.

Lans

( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: July 22, 2005 )

Thanks
I appreciate the positive feedback. I am a victim of public transportation and I see that some share in my queeziness of getting on the bus, train, subway, etc.

( Posted by: loonie [Member] On: July 23, 2005 )





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