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Life's fate
Holds me hostage.
Me here, so
Far away in a world not yours.
Tears no longer fall
In unison or agreement.
Someone help me,
Help me no longer feel.
Everyone abandons my sadness,
And me as well.
Where did life make this
Sudden twist?
When did fate decide
It no longer desired me.
Night crawls in silence
As hell opens its doors
To a deathly disease.
Over and over,
Sadness is a reality.
Never to end,
My dreams are all unreal.

"Your pain is the breaking of the shell that encloses your understanding" Khalil Gibran, The Prophet

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The following comments are for "Life's Fate"
by Serendipity

well, i think you need to stop thinking about how bad things are all the time because it's always bringing you down, i don't think i've read of your sunny side. don't get this the wrong way, i LOVE your writing. but " When did fate decide It no longer desired me" and "My dreams are all unreal" were just...a bit too gloomy. and i like gloomy a lot, but this was're thinking about this too much. and you're making my eyes twitch again!! take care and again, i'll wish for you:D

( Posted by: seniorme [Member] On: June 30, 2006 )

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