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Raw emotions concealed
I contend
To show so clearly as
You and I have lost so
I dare not dream of
A life this lonely
As I find no space
To lament my
Fears and losses.
I reach out in the
Emptiness of life
And declare
I succumb to death-
If my life is to be
Without you.

"Your pain is the breaking of the shell that encloses your understanding" Khalil Gibran, The Prophet

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Without You
Hi.. this is a nice piece of yours.It really seems that you have broken down without ur love.. but, to be very frank, why dont you take your life positively? Divort your mind in your favourite activities and try to be happy.. It ll really make a change in your life.. Kepp on writing..All the best.. cheers..

( Posted by: littledevil [Member] On: July 21, 2005 )

witout you
Hi's been soo long since I read you ...miss you soo much

I truly love all what you write and never miss any piece as much as I could...

I am really moved by ur poem ...maybe because I had passed by the same situation....and it was the toughest time for me after the break up...almost dead..

but my sweetie wrote me a sweet little bit resembles urs but in a positive way:

it says: imagine the night without moon , the body without heart , the face without eyes , andlife without soul ... it is me without you

sentimental and sweet


( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: September 29, 2005 )

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