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In your own little world
Didnít hear what was said
Just the laughter afterwards

Insolent and
An infant seeking pleasure
Ignoring all joys.

A useless past
Has always unleashed
An impervious present
That eats away at character
As acid on matter.

Cruelty is in the eye of the beholder
Every second gets much older
And deteriorates at its own consent

One must absorb
The opinions of others
And, in short, revel in the compliments
But its own court system
Must deliver consent.
Itís own beliefs
Will bring finality;
To prosecute or acquit.

Pass out
Drink up
With any luck
You will disintegrate.
Who can relate
With such a creature
That can only feel its hate?

No matter can absolve
The way one chooses
To be.
Only because its heart
Has caused it
A sterile amount
Of dishonesty.

The only way to change such luck
Is with inconformity.
Donít listen to the words of others
Their only intent will be
To gain or loose some
Endless noose
In their reality.

What a bunch of nonsense
To think of humankind.
Kind is not a word one
Human knows and uses
As divine.
Such a silly root to put into
Ignorance may be bliss
But choose insanity.

No one who knows that
There is no hope
Can believe the rules that be.
And every little sunshine
Tries to make us believe
That one day things will be better.
ďSay, man, how is the weather?Ē

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The following comments are for "CRUELTY IS IN THE EYE OF THE BEHOLDER"
by loonie

Angella, Welcome to I have to say you have a wonderful play on words here. I really enjoyed this. Several lines felt like homeruns. Example:

"One must absorb
The opinions of others
And, in short, revel in the compliments
But its own court system
Must deliver consent.
Itís own beliefs
Will bring finality;
To prosecute or acquit."

The only problem I had, which is not a problem is I thought the poem was over and then when I scrolled down I saw it was only halfway. You should really edit it and take out the spaces. Would be a shame if someone missed the second half. Look forward to reading more of you.

Nae ;0)

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: July 15, 2005 )



I liked this very much very, especially the last stanza on the second half. However, I think you could have made two poems out of this (just my opinion).


( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: July 16, 2005 )

Thank you guys for your positive comments. I was a little worried that no one would comment, much less like my stuff. I have edited the space as nae has suggested. It is a little long but it goes with my coagulated thoughts. They kind of stick together. I don't think any of it would have the depth alone due to some of the association I placed in the background. I appreciate the feedback.

( Posted by: loonie [Member] On: July 17, 2005 )

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