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Stuck on a topic for a poem
I will turn to You-Know-Who
The glory days of four years of hundreds of poems about you
Issues as in you have them
Drag me away to the woods
I dare you
Seems you got it out of your system with the female teen's gym shorts on the school roof
And the crying over PeeWee being cancelled
Not to mention canvassing suicide door to door
A ceramic pot smashed on the floor you knew was cracking anyhow
Wait a second, too late, thats already about the more recent girl of my dreams
Back to You-Know-Who
Comparing you, your hair, your clothes to inanimate objects
You should have seen the connections but you didn't
Only the author saw them so that must be why you never commented
And the poem disappeared within the hour
Your wavy blonde hair with chocolate roots
Your nose so sweet, I love it even though my friend was a jerk
The white rimmed sunglasses just like mine
The emerald green outfits
And vinyl jackets after the legendary football jacket
I vow this day to be better than you
Follow in your footsteps but fill them in along the way
Step in time and crush your feet with my steel toed boots
Love you as a child loves the limp body of his lost puppy dog
And I will wake up the following morning a god

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The following comments are for "A poem about You-Know-Who"
by claudita

Harry Potter
I thought it would be about Harry Potter. But it was great!

( Posted by: 00Greenleaf00 [Member] On: July 18, 2005 )

I may have commented on only one of your poems, but I want you to know I am following your writings. I find your "subject" intriguing.
I really do like how you write, your choice phrasing so that I can "feel" your pain in several of your poems.

Dare to be different. You do it so well. Very well done on this one Claudita.


( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: July 19, 2005 )

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