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Ugly things, knees are
Paradoxes in themselves
So sturdy as to repeatedly heft our weight
yet so fragile as to shatter with a twist like glass
Scarred with jolts and scrapes against hard ground
Sometimes numb with hours of begging
or praying, or both
Yet always willing to bounce back
to lift us up in jumps for joy
to pump us up to higher places
holy ground
or stadium seats
or temples to the sky
Abused, cursed, and ultimately
replaced.

------
Jewel L


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The following comments are for "Knees"
by JewelL

on Knees
Hi Jewel L.,

I enjoyed this homage to the knee. I currently have a bum knee with torn cartilage from dancing - on the job...?! Odd, but true!

This reads like a toast to The Knee. And so I suggest you take it just a bit further and sum it up with the proverbial "so here's to...", but not necessarily in those words. I think it's well done, but could go longer.

A bit that stood (ha) out to me was the use of "us up" in two consecutive lines: L9 & 10. That took away the power in those lines, in my opinion.

Otherwise, very entertaining.

Lans

( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: July 9, 2005 )

hmm...
very random indeed, but that's cool! I love random stuff that has no, apparent at least, source from which it came. I liked it a lot.

( Posted by: bingham66 [Member] On: September 9, 2005 )





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