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Standing on a shore
Bright daylight
Watching waves crashing
Longing for the ocean
yet turning for the car
The ocean stinks
It reeks of trash and dead fish
Every movement showing muddy water sludging with the tide
This damn red tide

Lingering on a shore
Deep midnight
Watching waves crashing
Yearning for the ocean
walking closer, closer
pitch black chill
the ocean glows
bright blue with neon
every movement flashing light
mystical glowing beast flying down the tide
This magic red tide


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Jewel L


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