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I've bric but no brac,
Knick without knack,
Old man, paddy-whack
(No dog, no bone.)

Seen Hackensack, Cadillac,
Blister pack and Pitch Black,
Humpback, heart attack
And Brainiac (who's a little scary.)

Had backpack or haversack,
Ski racks and bad back,
Love Shack, maniac
Midnight snack (and gall stones!)

Tried Kit Kat, jumping jacks,
Fishing tack and power pack.
Beaten track, hit the sack,
Tic tacs (didn't like'm.)

Been bushwhacked, cyber-hacked,
Bitch smacked and de-plaqued.
Taken aback, literary hack,
Mic Mac (still am, a little.)

I've rhyme but no time,
Write without bite,
Old man, paddy-whack
(No dogs, no bones.)



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The following comments are for "Knic"
by Philo

Philo,

I agree with Pen; these are lyrics. I hear the parentheticals being done by another voice, or by the same voice in an altered voice-over.

( Posted by: Flonigus [Member] On: July 2, 2005 )

Mi'Kmaq
My Grandfather's mother came down from Nova Scotia to Gloucester (fishing town to fishing town) where she met my Great Grandfather. The Mi'Kmaq territory runs from northern Maine up into and around Nova Scotia. She was part Mi'Kmaq. That's the story the way I remember it anyway.

I'm not familiar with the word Miramashee, so I'm afraid you'll have to explain it in rhyme.

I'll try singing this over the weekend and see what my family thinks! Thanks to you both for reading and commenting. -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: July 2, 2005 )

Phil - Knic
There's that rising and falling fun reading this as one would experience riding a roller coaster. I bet you enjoyed writing this as how I did reading. :0)

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: July 12, 2005 )

Peter-Knic
I did enjoy writing this. Its started out as mindless word play while driving in the car. I was wondering why bric a brac was phrase we use in English but you never see the bric without the brac, then it occured to me that bric without brac would be a little sad.

You can have the Knack for something though, and you don't need the Knick, but again, what if you've only got the Knick? Nursery rhymes for grown-ups is what I ended up with.

I'm glad you liked it and stopped to comment. -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: July 12, 2005 )

Great wRAP
What's nice about this piece is how you seem to have managed to take a current inventory of (what appears to be) your life experiences and place it in this rhythmical setting without "forcing" anything in.

( Posted by: poliArch [Member] On: July 15, 2005 )





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