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Play no sad songs
for me today.
While reeling on
the edge of insanity
I might forget myself,
my possessions, my vanity

and slip into the
debauched blackness
never to return to
this oppressive madness.




------
I read your poems
rich and sweet
then lay roses at
your feet.

Char


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The following comments are for "On the Edge"
by Char

Very well written Char
You did a superb job of pulling so much of the unknown into this tight little poem. As usual. So good to click on your name and know I am in for some good reading.

Thanks Char,
Dar

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: June 28, 2005 )

Edged: "On Edge"
Char- I love compression. Really like your idea here.

I'd lose "the," before "edge." I think a comma may be called for, after "insanity," since you seem to be going for correct grammar, throughout. Once again, I'd lose "the," before "debauched," but that's just me. I freely amidt to being anti-"the."

Good read. (Been reading your recent posts. Have enjoyed. Sorry, for not always commenting.)

Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: June 28, 2005 )

Thank You...
so much for reading and commenting, Dar and Bobby. I appreciate your thoughts and the time you spent to share them with me. No matter whether you comment on everything or not. It's nice to know you are reading.

Always,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: June 29, 2005 )

Thank You
Hi Penelope. Thank you for the nice comment. It's good to see you. I like your avatar.

Also, my thanks to you too Teflon for the rating. Nice to see your input as well.

Always,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: July 1, 2005 )

and back!
Hey! Whatchoo got against the edge of insanity? It's where I go to escape reality! Debauchery gets such a bad rap because most people aren't used to the true freedom that the infinite blackness can offer them. I'll see you on the edge!

( Posted by: metrozol [Member] On: July 10, 2010 )





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