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When the moon rises
I am thinking of you.

The stars twinkle
in all that you do.

Rainbows form to
grace your head.

The sun shines in
words you have said.

Rain falls to touch
your skin.

Clouds gather
to kiss you again,

And so do I.




------
I read your poems
rich and sweet
then lay roses at
your feet.

Char


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The following comments are for "You"
by Char

Char, through everything
I love how you've captured this.
Night/day
rain/shine

nice little poem

Dar ;)

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: June 21, 2005 )

Mmm yes
I like the comparisons and anaolgies to the clouds and the rain and such, very well written and nicely captured

( Posted by: essence [Member] On: June 22, 2005 )

sounds like...
You're still in love...that is great...took me back to the time.....I really liked this poem...Kacee

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: June 23, 2005 )

Thank You So Much
Everyone for the comments. I like the analogies also, essence and wrote for them, so to speak; addressing each one.

Always,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: June 26, 2005 )





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