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It's so dark in
this city tonight,
spirits call,
worries bite.
Amidst turmoil
I cling to thin air
for peace is elusive,
shrouded in despair.

It's too dark,
not one tiny light,
desperately I linger
in too much fright.
When will peace come
knocking on my door?
What's to be gained from
fragments on the floor?

It's far too dark.



------
I read your poems
rich and sweet
then lay roses at
your feet.

Char


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The following comments are for "It's Too Dark"
by Char

Bad company
S2, L2: Should this end with a period and the third line start a new sentence?

I liked this. Barely contained panic seems to swim just below the surface. You've rendered darkness as a veil that covers over the good things in life, leaving only fears and worries for company. Very effective. -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: June 20, 2005 )

Char, "It's Too Dark"
Wow, I am glad I came back with time on my side right now. I truly enjoy reading this well-woven poem of yours Char. The familiarities I experience and you explained them so well.

Like Philo, I too liked this. This is another example how you master brevity Char.


good show!
Darlene;)

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: June 20, 2005 )

Thank You
Philo, what a good observation that escaped me, but might possibly work either way. Thank you too Dar, for your comment. I appreciate the support.

Always,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: June 21, 2005 )





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