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One beautiful day
in April or May;
the month
I can’t remember
which; I was
strolling along
humming a silly song
when I happened
to encounter a witch.

She had a hooked nose;
shoes with curled toes,
a black cape and a
pointed hat up to here.
I gave my head a scratch
and said, “Figure that,
meeting a witch this
time of year.”

She cackled at me
with a tee-he-he
and then announced,
“Child, have no fear.
I would never hurt you;
I was once a kid too;
everything is okay, dear.”

With a gleam in her eye,
before saying goodbye,
she told me:
“Witches have gotten
a lot of bad press,
but take it from me
kids rule sweetie,”
and then she gave me
a caress.

Then I went on my way
this wonderful day
and the thought
crossed my mind
over and over;
that each day I must try
to do good somehow
and never judge a book
by its cover.



------
I read your poems
rich and sweet
then lay roses at
your feet.

Char


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The following comments are for "My Walk"
by Char

Char, "spooky themes" here today
Hey and you've posted another one!!

Oh, this is good. Not ONLY for kids, I enjoy this and the great underlying message is LOUD.

This HAS to be one of your more wordly poems. I am going to print this out for Sher. She would love this one too.

I recall this being one of Charmr's favorite, and what a nice birthday gift for him, to post this on his birthday. Nice idea.

Dar xo



( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: June 20, 2005 )

should be going to bed...
What fun, what wisdom in disguise...
Shel Silverstein springs to mind, but you have fewer fart jokes, so you have my vote.
Love your voice. Keep sharing- ty
E

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: June 20, 2005 )

Which is witch?
I agree whole heartedly with the others, lovely poem with a great message foe children.

The only thing I don't like is the word 'caress'. It makes me think of touching someones thigh for some reason and unless you (as the teller) are mistaking the witch for Michael Jackson (a logical mistake) then I think it's beibng used in the wrong context.

However I liked everything else about this poem and the rhyme scheme wile complicated to do, flowed very well.

Emlyn

( Posted by: Emlyn [Member] On: June 21, 2005 )

Emlyn, on Caress
Sorry Char, I don't mean to be rude at all on your thread.
Emlyn your comments are very well thought out. I wanted to discuss this word with you.

There are many words that seem to have taken on a wrong meaning with our experiences along our life's paths. We had a discussion on one thread using the word "Gay", as in jovial.

Such a thing IMO seems to be with this word.

"Caress
an act or expression of kindness or affection : ENDEARMENT"

When I read this poem of Char's that is exactly how I viewed the word, a gentle stroke from a Witch's hand.

Thanks for your time. Please excuse me if you think it rude, just trying to help the word out.

Darlene

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: June 21, 2005 )

Caressing Darlene
Apologies from me too Char although I think Darlene makes a good statement considering the word 'caress' and as you decided to use it, I being outnumbered, will tread very carefully.

'Caress' has two meanings which although seemingly alike are very different and I think we're coming from a different meaning.

Caress is certainly to touch but it depends on the manner of touch. affectionate or sexual. The sound of the word has always made me subconsciously think of the latter.

That being said, I can't and won't try to disprove what you've said Dareva and I greatly enjoy discussing the merits and connotations of words. I am willing to call this little tete-a-tete a 50-50 draw or should that be 50-25-25?

I still like your poem very much Char and seeing as it's yours I will say no more.

Emlyn




( Posted by: Emlyn [Member] On: June 21, 2005 )

Emlyn
Hi, leaving it up to Char.

I just wanted to address how we have SO many words with meanings and we do tend to learn and use them differently. I quoted it from a dictionary. AND like the word "petting" which can be used innocently as well as sexual..

But it was IMO.....and not debating, just informing, which I find interesting to do here at Lit....helps expand our knowledge.
Thanks for replying tho'...

Dar

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: June 21, 2005 )

My Walk
I have always liked this little poem. The first draft, third stanza did'nt rhyme. I liked it equally as well if not better. As to words in this poem with multiple meanings, it seems to me the obvious one is witch. Great poem Char....gave you a ten. Also I liked your witch in this piece. She is almost as nice as Michael Jackson and the Pigs are not out to get her either.

( Posted by: Charmr [Member] On: June 21, 2005 )

Thanks Everyone
I appreciate your comments and attention. Thanks so much for reading and sharing.

Always,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: June 21, 2005 )

LOL!!!!
Thanks for the chuckle Charmr. I am pleased you like the revision too.

Always,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: June 26, 2005 )





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