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The rock that bleeds sand with every bite you take is now gone with wind,
Ashes suffocating, the flow of serenity.
Weathering the longing for subtle hairs and tight skins
Disguises which we use, to feel are now tattered
And strewn across open fires

Now all empathy has been drained
No comfort can be sought.
You run off my eyes, like water off a duck.

laments for black clouds, shadows thoughts.
Sand eating away remorse and cursing memories
Memories that fade with under falling waters,
Saturating and drowning in thick mud.

Deafening laments lift eyes upwards
Searching the stars for consolation.
Crude laments of lust and mystery
Crude laments for a woman.

Brick upon brick you build your fortress
Stones flying to beat it down its walls
Surrender, they shout
Surrender goddess, come out

Come out from behind your veils
Let me taste you.
To tear away your flesh to naked soul
To stare and understand itís questions
Interpret your reasons for concealment

Surrender goddess
Deny love if you must but surrender yourself
Shed of pretensions
Unafraid to dance before hierarchy
Dance before them naked

Move with the wind amidst your thighs
Water flowing from your lips,
Flowing upwards to your hips
Like currents and torrents.

Now the waters have dried up
And you lay, a slain goddess
Exhausted, naked.


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The following comments are for "dance of seduction"
by fcukedupboi

Josimar, I went back and reread this about 10 times. I am captivated by it. Seems to have more in it with every read. Excellent.


( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: June 22, 2005 )

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