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random random random
ransom ransom ransom
hate fear hate fear
anger love anger love
breath the fire
burn the acid
break me down
faster faster
if you cared
would it matter
if you loved
i'd be sadder
hate and pain
bring me down
to the abiss
i dont want
these emotions anymore
take them away
you were a bastard before
i dont care
if you dont care
if i was here
then you were there
we miss the thought
of our loneliness
we miss the thought of ourselves
nothing matters anymore
the dark is gone
it all is gone
anger love anger love
hate fear hate fear
ransom ransom ransom
random random random

If I did it...I didn't mean to.
If I hurt you...I didn't mean to.
If I left you...I didn't mean to.
If I scared you...I didn't mean to.
If I loved you...I didn't mean to.

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The following comments are for "love fear ransom random"
by Nicicole

nice job
Minamalistic use of words really suited this piece, and I felt the contention in it. Best lines
"if you cared
would it matter
if you loved
i'd be sadder"
and to me
"the dark is gone
it all is gone"
I noticed the dark is gone, contrasted by the usual reference to a light being gone, which was a very nice touch I thought mimicking the feelings throught the piece.
Correct spelling "to the abiss" (abyss)
My only questions is over the "Random, Ransom" repitition, but it strikes me as comming and going out of underlying inner belief system. Like "Life is 'Random'", "My life is 'Ransomed'". That's just my interpretaion. A Moving piece.

( Posted by: malthis [Member] On: July 14, 2002 )

thanks! ^_^
I hadn't intended to make this a poem, but it turned out that way...
right now i'm waiting for my friend to switch me off of 'hold'. ...damn call waiting!

Thanks really!


( Posted by: nicicole [Member] On: July 14, 2002 )

random - reminds me of ts elliot's frufrock: "visions and revisions...that's not it all, it's not it at all"

somehow love is nothing but a complicated endeavor.

( Posted by: webguy [Member] On: September 16, 2002 )

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