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For the sun sets
on every man,
pennies in his pocket
or fortunes at hand.

Sharing a space
meant for all,
some rise while
others may fall.

Why we are here
may never be known,
some surrounded
yet others are alone.

Dreams are dreamt
by each man,
some are born
some are sand.

The sun rises
across the land,
may it bring hope
inspiring all to stand.



------
I read your poems
rich and sweet
then lay roses at
your feet.

Char


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The following comments are for "Reality"
by Char

Reality
The rhyme scheme was reasonably good. The rhythm was even better. Good work.

( Posted by: Dfortyseven [Member] On: June 18, 2005 )

Reality...
very nice...very, very, nice... reads well, explains all...

Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: June 18, 2005 )

Ah! reality

Good read...heavy subject, I wish my reality as you say.

Nice,

macbeth

( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: June 18, 2005 )

Char's Reality
well now I have nothing to say the above comments spoke my words.....
Char, this is a greatly written. Stand tall.

Keep on submitting ..I am enjoying reading and sharing here with you....

love ya
Dar

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: June 18, 2005 )

Thanks Everyone
I appreciate your comments and warmth Dfortyseven, Robinbird, macbeth, and Dar. Thanks so much for your time. Here's to a wonderful reality for everyone. :)

Always,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: June 19, 2005 )

WOW CHAR..nice Avatar,
Sorry....um NOT!!!

Gorgeous lady, sure is a nice avatar. I am here to look for more Brevity, Verbosity....um, shoot, not sure what , just entertainment...but came across your new avatar and HAD to say something.

XO, Dar;)

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: June 19, 2005 )

Thanks Dar
Glad you like it. I get tired of them after a bit and have to change them if I can find anything presentable. :)

Always,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: June 19, 2005 )

Enjoy reading it!
Wow... I can feel the power while reading your nice poem, thanks so much for your wonderful writing and incredible thinking.
Clark

( Posted by: Clark [Member] On: August 1, 2005 )

Thank You
Thank you for commenting Clark. I appreciate it very much. Glad you like my poem.

Always,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: August 1, 2005 )





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