Bad Date: Three Pseudo-Haikus
by strangedaze (Member) - published: June 16, 2005
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'Friday Night at the Drake Bar and Grill'

fractured nicotine air shatters like a rock on a window frame
serrated edges of a foggy vodka guillotine cut her throat wide open
musikal fingers slide across the guy's cheek,
bloody red drops of her fall and float like clouds in his drink.

'1:13 am, 1022 Horner Crescent, Apt. 509'

"God found in sticky folds, communion with latex and lubricant
swollen lips swallow me whole
leaving scuffed sneakers untied on the bathroom floor."

'Saturday Morning- After'

Strobe light batteries die -

A match strikes his retina -

Her tongue tastes like Drano.

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"Imperious, choleric, irascible, extreme in everything, with a dissolute imagination the like of which has never been seen... there you have me in a nutshell, and kill me again or take me as I am, for I shall not change."

From his Last Will & Testament, Marquis de Sade

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The following comments are for "Bad Date: Three Pseudo-Haikus"
by strangedaze

psuedo Andy

Surreal and abstract, good imagery I like the "Friday Night" one the best.

you are still perverse and twisted (lol)

macbeth

( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: June 16, 2005 )

"Date"
Andrew- I like story. Am not sold on title.

Enjoyed imagery.

"scuffed sneakers untied"...Yes.

Good read...
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: June 16, 2005 )

Mac n' Bobby
Mac - Friday night seems to be the overall favorite. The middle is brutal from my angle, but I liked the brusqueness of the finale. Glad you still find me perverse and twisted, compliments like that keep me going.

Bobby - I was trying to sell this with its imagery. Glad you liked it. The title is an unrepentent whore, it's true, so I might change it around. Thanks for the heads up.

Androo

( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: June 16, 2005 )

HighDroo
DrooKu? Hi You!

"575 Regrets"?

Friday night, Drake's Bar

Horner Crescent Apartment

Saturday Morning

Lans

( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: June 16, 2005 )

Lans
I knew you'd come through for me ;)

Assy

( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: June 16, 2005 )

Rough Weekend
These are coarse and gravely. They sound like the Sunday morning voice after a night of smoke, drink and yelling over loud music.

The second one needs some kind of a bio-hazard label. Makes me want to wash my hands. -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: June 19, 2005 )

Still readin’, still squirmin’, still likin’
Jesus. And I thought I'd had all the bad dates! Think I like you best in poetry. An unforgiving format - all image, no self-indulgence. You wear it well.

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: November 2, 2005 )

Odd
I just claimed *not* to be a poet in my other piece. I guess I'm just a mess.

( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: November 3, 2005 )

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