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The taste of every single bitter word
reveals its meaning, and your flying time
comes by to cast on me a purple spell.
Oblivion... in every single line
of letters that I write, awaiting your return.
Although my voice is high, in silent flame I burn.
 
In absentia, does your love truly burn
or flicker, as the candle lights each word?
Paper tiger, troubled past no point of return
to patience which can’t abide the time
that you’re taking to drop me a line.
In dismal hell, I dwell for a spell.
 
In silence of the night, your name I spell 
and curtains sway, and yellow candles burn, 
but not for us; unless I outline 
my memories of you: a mischief word, 
a kiss, a second glance, you, taking time 
to write, to cross a point of no return. 
 
The white paper moon will wax and return
on pale origami sails blown by a spell
of trade winds tripping across time.
Saint Elmo’s spirit, in a ghostly blue burn,
shivers along each whispered word
that’s woefully printed, line by line. 

I watch your sails sent over the line
of the horizon. Whether they return
or not, I will be at my window: and words
will ride the win, like feathers, like a spell
of crystal morning... Can you wait to burn
my letters, please, and look for me this time?
 
I can ill afford the ravages of time
that stack paper dolls into a white line,
and torch them into a gypsy moth burn
while sea sirens plot you beyond return.
Each force factoring in the last spell,
and jostling, for the heard last word.
 
Deciphering each word sand blasted by time:
Straining to spell cast across dew droplet line:
Surely, as tides will return, love letters won’t burn. 

City (Olga) & Penelope
15/06/05



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"No one can make you feel inferior without your consent" - Eleanor Roosevelt



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The following comments are for "Pacific - sestina"
by Penelope

paper dolls are dancing in joy
thank you, Pen
it was fun!

( Posted by: City [Member] On: June 16, 2005 )

Pacific sestina
There might be a typo in the 4th sestet, 4th line: perhaps "wind" rather than "win"?

I have to say I know how exacting it is to unify a sestina in collaboration, when the stanzas are written by each collaborator in turn. This sestina achieves that unity, and more. From sestet to sestet, the reader gets a sense of the interlocutors reflecting, questioning, returning to what's already been said, looking to the future, wondering, pondering etc... In the same way that exchanged letters, themselves, do. This congruency, and perfect alignment, between process and content here is delightful. (But then again, the synergy is no surprise; in fact, an absence of it would worry me ;-)

Those trade winds tripping across time and that spell of crystal morning are no less than enchanting.

The semantic diversity of the repeating words is very nicely fanned out here.

From comments, "paper dolls are dancing with joy" is, to me, as interesting as it is important: I know the joy of completing a collaborative sestina. I think as many collaborators as possible should know this joy. I would love to see collaborative sestinas here from time to time...

Pen, Olga, what's next?

Lucie

( Posted by: windchime [Member] On: June 17, 2005 )

Lucie
Thanks so much and I do believe that should be wind in the fifth sestet. Also thank you for doing the punctuation corrections for us too! It's so nice to have an expert to call on for a favour. Collaborations are an intriguing look into how creativity gets swept away with the other person's ideas. Even though this was long in the composing, due to the hiccoughs of life, it went very well. If Olga wants to do another one, I'm game. How about you Lucie? ;-)

( Posted by: Penelope [Member] On: June 17, 2005 )

another one?
I'd love to!
you choose the words this time :)


PS: yes, it was the "wind" of course!

( Posted by: City [Member] On: June 17, 2005 )

You've got it!
Okay Olga - the first sestet and the finale are done and on their way.

( Posted by: Penelope [Member] On: June 18, 2005 )

silence
well... nobody seems to be interested in this ... whit is it anyway?
a cry for help? I guess a good bottle of wine could help these lovers to find a way back to their happiness ...

( Posted by: City [Member] On: June 22, 2005 )





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