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The North wind blows
across the meadows
gathering tiny
flower petals,
each one delicate
and unique,
waltzing on the
lofty breeze;
swirling onto
splendid grasses
gently reaching
for fragrant faces
to hold them near
until another
gust appears.



------
I read your poems
rich and sweet
then lay roses at
your feet.

Char


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The following comments are for "Tiny Petals"
by Char

Shivering petals
Char,

I felt like frigid fall had come to chill the tea roses! You sent a shiver down my spine and gave me gooseflesh!

To make a suggestion, I would remove the 'and' before 'unique' to read:

"each one delicate,
uniquely waltzing
on the lofty breeze..."

I hate to bust this up, but that's my only thought on the matter.

Very precious and felt fragile.

Lans

( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: June 17, 2005 )

Thanks
Lans...I appreciate your input; it's a great suggestion too; one I will take. I try to keep everything pared down but missed that one. So happy you like this and took the time to say so. :)

Always,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: June 17, 2005 )

GG's right on Char!
WOW, so nice to see such brilliant minds on the same page, how lucky for me.

Char your artistic mind flows with words to show us that wonderful photo etched in your memory. Great phrases here woven tightly.....which you do so well. Love it.

"waltzing on the
lofty breeze;
swirling onto
splendid grasses" my favorite.

Dar

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: June 17, 2005 )

Thanks
Dar...for your thoughts. What a compliment about nice to see such brilliant minds on the same page.

Always,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: June 19, 2005 )





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