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[started: 09-06-05, finished 10-06-05]

As she opens her eyes, awakening to the first light
The sunshine streams across her face
Smothering the dark with her beauty
Radiating the world with her smile
Here she is standing before me
The girl in my dream
She evaporates into the new day

Her hands become like silken clouds
She fades away, where is she now?
She has to go, but go to where?
The next section shows what truly was there

I open my eyes awakening to the first light
The sunshine streams across my face
Her memory still smothering the dark with her beauty
Her voice just an echo replayed in my heart
On my skin I can still feel the cotton and lace
In the back of my mind, I still see her face

Something so real was just an illusion
She fades into unconsciousness
Waiting for her chance to come back another night
But each night is what was just an illusion
It doesn't exist, for the sun is dawning
With her every night is always just the beginning,
Just the beginning of a brand new morning

Her lips are soft, warm, her presence is irredescent
She will captivate you, mesmorised also by her intriguing mist scent
It must only be a dream because with her it is ALWAYS pleasant
Consciousness lurks among the midst of dreams
Breaking through into reality, tearing away at fantasy's seams
But underneath the realm of unconsciousness she quietly gleams

Closing your eyes and drifting away
Her smile lighting up like a candle once again
She comes to finish what before she once started
She returns to the world from which she once parted
She'll pretend she's forever, but she is nothing but a dream
A dream of the fortunate, but not a dream to be seen
She'll evaporate your soul and sent it to her world
A place that doesn't exist, over feelings you have no control
And when her time is up and she begins to fade
The only truth you'll come to realise
Is she will last for a while just until the sun is dawning
And then you'll realise every night with her will always
Always give way to a brand new morning
Enjoy her while she lasts, for in a moment she'll be gone
Whether you like it or not, you'll open your eyes
Open your eyes to a brand new morning

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The following comments are for "The girl in my dream"
by autumnmist

Great work ol chap. I have to say i like it, but it takes some time to read, since you used the *i have to rhyme* thing every now and then,

Like "The only truth you'll come to realise
Is she will last for a while just until the sun is dawning"

The word "is" off sets that section but it works.
Nice job

( Posted by: Siah [Member] On: June 12, 2005 )

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