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Comes a thunderstorm
Rumble my tears and lighting
My words are my wrath.....


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The following comments are for "I'M Alive!"
by Robinbird

Robin's "Wrath"
Robin- I like idea of this one. Word "my" being used 3 times did weaken it a bit, for me.

Keep using pen,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: June 12, 2005 )

Robin...I'm alive


In response to Bobby's comment:

"The wrath of Robin"

It sounds like we are in the same wavelength.

I like that sound, along with your words girl


( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: June 12, 2005 )

I see your point, does throw off some...Thank you for your insight...

always...respect Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: June 12, 2005 )

macbeth...& wrath!
you know me more than know I have a gentle heart, so guess you see, times are tough...macbeth, thank you for your insight and caring...

just Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: June 12, 2005 )

Robin's wrath

I'm glad you agree that one can have a gentle or even an innocent side as well as a powerful "don't fuck with me" side.

answer your phone,


( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: June 12, 2005 )

Haikudos to ya
Haiku---no, but interesting .....oh yes......powerfull .....yes--------way to express that don't fuck with me tude....

( Posted by: LamemansTerms [Member] On: June 13, 2005 )

Wow.a good senryu, perhaps; but more expressing your own opinion rather than making a potent image.
an interesting read.
--R K

( Posted by: R.K.Singh [Member] On: June 21, 2005 )

Hey Ya'll...I have been envolved in moving...Thank ya'll, for reading and responding. I liked this write much, just me.

Thanks ALL! just Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: July 10, 2005 )

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