The following comments are for "Free style, American Haiku" by malthis
beautiful, touching, meaningful, but...what?!
The words are great, the meaning is there, the emotion is heartwrenching, they express a lot with very little, but...this is not a haiku...a haiku is 5-7-5. This is 4-3-4...is there something someone didn't tell me? Otherwise, it's great.
Reardless of what our teachers taught us, modern non-Japanese Haiku is often not held to 17 syllables of 5-7-5. From what I've studied about it, English takes less syllables to convey a meaning, therefore the optimal number would be around 11 syllables. Mine is 12. Either way, this is called Free Style, somewhat like Free Verse poetry. The idea is still simplicity, brevity, and allowing the mind to connect what was not written. I also called it American cause I think modern Haiku is not about Nature as it is about the human condition and more western values. So it's a switch.