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She writes those sad songs
And cries herself to sleep
She screams the saddest apology
but no one hears a peep

As she lies awake at night
Watching every moment go by
She screams for it to slow down
And wishes she would die

She wishes she was good enough
For anything and anyone
But she says its over
No more she's done


The following comments are for "Broken But Beautiful"
by Nigz

Broken But Beautiful
The title is the best line in this poem.

It's a great title and says everything of the subject you are writing of.

I didn't like the flow of the poem. The only positive that stood out were the words used in the first verse: Writes, Cries, Screams. That says more of the poet than the whole piece.

( Posted by: A. Cain [Member] On: June 14, 2005 )

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