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Blind Ambition cannot stop me

Even when I -
stuck in folds of time, waves of revulsion,
(having declared myself "something" from nothing and yet,
am still
"nothing")
couldn't deign to know your terse requisites.
Yet care to,
entirely.

Sometimes I truly believe
I have strength enough
to destroy
ME
- or you.
It depends.

Do I have strength enough
for failure?
To hear your voice
Out-of-Tune
for another 25
or so?


Blind ambition cannot stop me

A dream of you,
Talking to me in clipped varieties (vagaries)
forever ever with advice columns
and
perfect Op-eratic renditions.
Emphatic, emollient,
Subtle, terrible.
With words that force me to lie, head in lap,
choking from spittle and spray,
sprained and strained
from epitaphs and epithets,
begging to please you,
like a dog, still dying
for forgiveness for
what I know not
and never will.




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The following comments are for "Blind Ambition"
by Macro

A Lonely Post, Welcome to Lit. Macro
I found this immense piece in the Lonely posts. Just found your poem here. I am not even going to critique it in anyway.
I like it just as it is. Tell me if you are pleased with how it came out on the page? Are you pleased?

Blind ambition, yet this sounds hopeless. Perhaps I am taking this too literally, but that is how it reads.

I like it, like the free form of it, the flow, the use of good words.....got the hint you may have been sitting in front of a Dictionary, each word that follows, a repeat of the first letter, the next follows, as out of such a book.

Still like it. I also weighing the idea that you really know your vocabulary and utilize this knowledge well.....if that is the case, I appreciate that.

Thanks for sharing..........hope others will follow my comment to read this.

Since this is your first poem here, hope I see more of you,
Darlene

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: June 23, 2005 )





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