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You were fired from Earth;
The first explorer of the solar system.
Never to return.
What have you witnessed?
Where are you bound?
When will your journey end?
And what lies in wait for you?


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The following comments are for "Voyager"
by Dfortyseven

what lies


Good read, I fired myself...I don't know lies await me. I especially loved the last two lines.


( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: June 8, 2005 )

MacBeth, you have been the most consistent respondent to what I have presented. My E-mail address is part of my bio. I would like to talk to you off-site.

( Posted by: Dfortyseven [Member] On: June 8, 2005 )


Your email is not on your Bio, I was going to send you an email.

I don't display mine publicly because the last time I did that on my Amazon reviews, I got Spam/Porn mail.


( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: June 8, 2005 )

"Ground control to Major Tom..."
Dfortyseven- Once again, seems like beginning of something. Questions. Alright, tell us a story.

As it reads, it doesn't "fire" me anywhere.

Just found your work, so to be fair, I will read a few more. Maybe I'm missing something. I'm all about compression. Concise and pithy is good, but you have to tell a story, or something. Maybe you could tell some stories from the "voyage."

Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: June 8, 2005 )

I'm waiting for more information on Voyager. When I receive it I'll rewrite this piece.

( Posted by: Dfortyseven [Member] On: June 12, 2005 )

D47...& voyage...
typical, I read a world in this, due to my experiences only...for me, this tells a story,
a write that I can relate to...D47, most times or let's say many times my writes, come out
intended only for myself, 'cause I'm the only one that knows what I'm talking about...

not making comparison of you to me...
this write of yours has sturdy ground, and is
quite alright...

just Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: June 12, 2005 )

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